Re: he is dead by roses are read	12-May-02/8:32 PM
a nice thought, but wasn't portrayed as well as it could have been. there's not enough structure/flow for me to feel.
Re: Homecoming by ObiWonKn	12-May-02/8:30 PM
the first two stanzas seem to be leading up to something, but I can't tell what angle you're taking with the final. perhaps more could be explained, somehow?
Re: Civilization by ifni	12-May-02/8:27 PM
I've heard a theory that consciousness arises out of the ability to lie. :)
Re: Street Me by wlshepherd	12-May-02/8:27 PM
I don't get it.
Re: Vituperation by crims0ngh0st	12-May-02/8:25 PM
unpleasantly redundant.
Re: passion by lexicon	12-May-02/8:24 PM
interesting. I'm impressed with how awkward you made almost every single grouping of words. But I can't say I find that pleasant.
Re: Fragment by goldfish	12-May-02/8:23 PM
a beautiful fragment, but really needs some sort of capping at the end somehow.
Re: Untitled by swift_enterprises	12-May-02/8:21 PM
eh?
Re: Ionic Winter by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
I don't get it, though I think I'd like to...
Re: silence of the sky by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
eh?
Re: granite hearts by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
sweet, but weird.
Re: Summer Vacation by weeb	12-May-02/8:17 PM
this is hilarious. :)
Re: Bring back the golden calf by rrrr	12-May-02/8:17 PM
I don't get it.
Re: Hammered Nail by drjhoss	10-May-02/9:07 PM
an interesting twist at the end, but I'm afraid this reads more like notes jotted down than a poem... (and It's == it is, its == possessive)
Re: nation by roses are read	10-May-02/9:33 AM
except for the top three lines, this reads backwards very nicely (perhaps better)? all in all, though, I don't get it.
Re: Synergy by searching	10-May-02/9:30 AM
strange. this almost feels like a book report, with an allegory here and there and not much ... direct substance. but pretty nonetheless.
Re: affirmative action by thelonefrobros	10-May-02/9:23 AM
uhhhhh. huh.
Re: Sleep Well by jriemerm	10-May-02/9:23 AM
ooh, yum yum yum. =)
Re: Fragrant Blossom by Jody Conn	10-May-02/9:19 AM
yum. =) the first line says it all, but the supporting lines are tasty as well.
Re: Transient world by daryash-koh	10-May-02/9:18 AM
hmm. I actually like the rhythm building up, but only as taken seriosly; the last line, while ostensibly an amusing twist, doesn't really do it for me. Maybe if you kept running with the humor and tied it into the poem more?