poemranker ::20 most recent comments by nentwined (1001-1020) and replies

Comments bynentwined, 1001–1020 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on he is dead by roses are read 12 May 2002, 8:32 PM
a nice thought, but wasn't portrayed as well as it could have been. there's not enough structure/flow for me to feel.
on Homecoming by ObiWonKn 12 May 2002, 8:30 PM
the first two stanzas seem to be leading up to something, but I can't tell what angle you're taking with the final. perhaps more could be explained, somehow?
on Civilization by ifni 12 May 2002, 8:27 PM
I've heard a theory that consciousness arises out of the ability to lie. :)
on Street Me by wlshepherd 12 May 2002, 8:27 PM
I don't get it.
on Vituperation by crims0ngh0st 12 May 2002, 8:25 PM
unpleasantly redundant.
on passion by lexicon 12 May 2002, 8:24 PM
interesting. I'm impressed with how awkward you made almost every single grouping of words. But I can't say I find that pleasant.
on Fragment by goldfish 12 May 2002, 8:23 PM
a beautiful fragment, but really needs some sort of capping at the end somehow.
on Untitled by swift_enterprises 12 May 2002, 8:21 PM
eh?
on Ionic Winter by david 12 May 2002, 8:20 PM
I don't get it, though I think I'd like to...
on silence of the sky by david 12 May 2002, 8:20 PM
eh?
on granite hearts by david 12 May 2002, 8:20 PM
sweet, but weird.
on Summer Vacation by weeb 12 May 2002, 8:17 PM
this is hilarious. :)
on Bring back the golden calf by rrrr 12 May 2002, 8:17 PM
I don't get it.
on Hammered Nail by drjhoss 10 May 2002, 9:07 PM
an interesting twist at the end, but I'm afraid this reads more like notes jotted down than a poem... (and It's == it is, its == possessive)
on nation by roses are read 10 May 2002, 9:33 AM
except for the top three lines, this reads backwards very nicely (perhaps better)?

all in all, though, I don't get it.
on Synergy by searching 10 May 2002, 9:30 AM
strange. this almost feels like a book report, with an allegory here and there and not much ... direct substance. but pretty nonetheless.
on affirmative action by thelonefrobros 10 May 2002, 9:23 AM
uhhhhh. huh.
on Sleep Well by jriemerm 10 May 2002, 9:23 AM
ooh, yum yum yum. =)
on Fragrant Blossom by Jody Conn 10 May 2002, 9:19 AM
yum. =) the first line says it all, but the supporting lines are tasty as well.
on Transient world by daryash-koh 10 May 2002, 9:18 AM
hmm. I actually like the rhythm building up, but only as taken seriosly; the last line, while ostensibly an amusing twist, doesn't really do it for me.

Maybe if you kept running with the humor and tied it into the poem more?