Tascobar
on The Limerick of Dave by worldsofwar
15 Nov 2002, 4:59 AM
This may actually be the dullest, least inspired, most insipid effort I have seen to date. 0. It is actually traumatic to read more than once.
A pointless poeme, but a decent effort nevertheless. 6. An enjoyable use of 30 seconds.
Aaaaaaah. I can feel my heart melting. 3. Less of a poem, more a plot line on a crappy, low-budget US sitcom.
It astonishes me how people can't cope with a bit of politics. You're a bit late to slag off this poem, really. It happened months ago. Read the comments above and weep with sorrow for the world today.
I detect a vile stench, and I suspect that the culprit is this poeme. 1.
This putrid pile of festering bile should never have seen the light of day. 0. Add to the equation that if you feel that making friends with an illiterate deserves "poetic" tribute, I conclude that you are one lonely bitch, in addition to being an appalling poet. I bid you good day.
This isn't a sonnet. It ain't iambic. There's nothing wrong with it, but it's not a sonnet. Call it something else.
Liked the whole turtle thing.
Horus is right your user name sucks like A scene from the Oval office, change it to something like funkyspunkydwarfmonkey.
i'm high
God forgive me for laughing when they violated you in the hinges, very poignant, original slant on bullying, liked the style of it, self pity with style, and i'm thinking of the time i glued a paper penis on neil bentleys head.
i'm giving this a 9, you missed one for not killing the bastards , kill kill kill !
The person in the poem isn't me. It's a character I invented out of my own head, who isn't real. Although I do live in an attic room. I'll give a prize to anyone who can work out where I got the mollusc king from. There's a clue in my personal details on this site.
Your'e a tasteless homophobe, you can't write worth a damn, and you're a right royal arsewipe. I'd stick a positive comment in there somewhere, but I can't seem to find one...
Yet more proof that your poems suck arse. Leave this site now, while you still habe a shred of dignity.
yes!sounds decisive.it's really good.yes you've lost the rhythm in last line I can say.10.maybe the last satanza has no problem.but is less powerful than the rest of it.
it's nice.one likes to recite it on some occasions.7
I think if you use past tense(fighted/proved)the sense of nothingness will become more oppressing in the poem.
very much like "sanity's defeat".but I guess there's no more a "one day".it's for that 'he's tombstone.7
nice!8
too sugary, post an angry poem
Such a horible experience needs more beautiful words, baptize yourself in your emotion more, liked it enough - 6